Chapter 16: Loose Ends
Chapter 16 is now available for download.
Will the Hutchins cousins come through and deliver our four boys to safety? Will the plane be waiting?
Check out Chapter 16 to find out for yourself!
Will the Hutchins cousins come through and deliver our four boys to safety? Will the plane be waiting?
Check out Chapter 16 to find out for yourself!
posted by Andy Losik at 12:24 PM
2 Comments:
The story is going very well. Can't wait to see what happens next.
You invite feedback. The only thing that didn't ring true in this chapter is when they guys rationalized taking the $180 from the wallet. This behavior ran counter to their good guy image.
I would have felt it more in character if they took the room key, but left the cash behind.
Thanks! Keep turning those chapters out!
Thanks for the thoughts. Desperate times call for desperate matters and I guess Terry had just had enough. Yes, it was out of character for the Terry that we think we know.
Glad you like the story! keep listening.
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